Microfiction: Love
His love
“Should I break your heart?” she asked as she looked at him in the eyes. “Should I play with it until you are hurt so bad that you will hate me, disgust by me? Should I play with your mind and lead you on to make you believe you count for me? Should I pretend to be in love with you?” The boy was processing her words. Shocked, humiliated, and crushed, he was. The girl was still staring at him indifferently. He knows her since 1st grade, infatuated by her since. Love at first sight, an unrequited one. “Yes.”
Her Love
She lied.
She didn’t want him to suffer. Trust issues, afraid of commitments, of being
loved. She was selfish. She was aware of it. She stared at him to memorize each
feature of his face. She knew him since 1st grade, infatuated by him since.
Love at first sight. “Goodbye.”
Author's note: I am currently reading “The Wicked King” by Holly Black and rewatching a Korean drama, “Innocent Man.” And got inspired by the two. There is a lot of restraint feeling in both works. Happy Valentine's Day!
Hi! I think it is really cool that you chose to do a microfiction! I considered writing one of these but decided that I did not know how to write a good story in that few of words. You did a really good job! I like the sort of ominous tone your story has even though it is a sort of love, heartbreak story. I also like that it is sort of poetic. It almost sounds like a sad poem about love. Because it is so short, I find it even more intriguing. It makes me want to know more. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHello! I absolutely loved this microfiction! I love how short yet powerful it was. Seeing both perspectives really made the story more traumatic than just seeing one side. It hurts that the girl is selfish and lets the boy she loves go because she is scared of things. :( I also really liked how from the. boys perspective you used a lot of questions and from girls perspective it was all statements to prove his uncertainty and her certainty.
ReplyDeleteWow, this micro fiction was extremely short, but extremely moving and powerful. In the span of two paragraphs the message you got across was heavy, but delivered in a perfectly paced manner. Your writing skills are super impressive because I don't think I could ever condense a story to this length and still carry this weight and impact. The minute the perspectives swapped, the sadness of the love between the two set in and I felt it in my chest.
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